Friday Fictioneers #6

OH MY GAWD IT’S A DIRIGIBLE GAIS.

Ok, so it’s good year which is messing up my greedy steampunk eye but know what?  THAT’S OK CAUSE IT’S A DIRIGIBLE.

~^~

When stowing away a dirigible, it was important to get close to the engine room.  That way, one didn’t freeze to death at cruising altitude.  It was also important not to get too close so as not to sweat to death.

He’d forgotten that.  Two hours in and he couldn’t take it any longer.  He crept onto the catwalk above the observation room.

His breath caught.  Below him spread the velvety clouds, a blanket of grey-white which would spark envy in the most beautiful swan.

“Wow…”

“Yep.” His head whipped around.  A woman tipped her admiral’s hat.  ” ‘ello.”

“Eep.”

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About Kaitlin

Kaitlin and Michael are co-authors of The Athele Series. They met in summer of 2006 and married in fall of 2009. They both teach English in South Korea. In his free time, Michael writes, plays video games, plays DnD, and idly contemplates world domination. In her free time, Kaitlin writes, runs, dances, and feeds her 'oo-shiny!' complex.

26 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers #6

  1. dbfurches says:

    Knew to expect steampunk with an airship in the prompt! Thanks for your comments on my post: http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/06/08/a-scene-over-the-cloud-sea/

  2. Linda says:

    I remember as a child traveling on the ferry from England to Holland and there was a section of the ship marked ‘for aliens only’; I was intrigued because I was only young and this story reminded me of that moment when my world collided with another :-)

  3. JKBradley says:

    BUSTED! So, now what? Does she cast him off? Or keep him?

    The steampunk theme is actually very fun, I’ve not written in this genre before.

    http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/flash-fiction-friday-the-gospel/#comment-744

  4. V.L. Gregory says:

    Nice! Love that he got caught! :-) Soooo many wonderful comments and I agree with all of them. Your cloud description was beautiful.

    Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

  5. sphrbn says:

    Is Eep a real word? haha. This week there has been many great stories, this is one in my opinion.

  6. Hope she doesn’t throw him overboard. Some great description and humour too.

  7. rich says:

    he’d have been better of sweating.

  8. rgayer55 says:

    Hmm . . . perhaps romance above the clouds. This is the first time I’ve visited your blog. It’s very nice. I look forward to reading more from you two.

    thanks for flattering comment on mine. Here’s the link for others. http://russellgayet.blogspot.com/

  9. erinleary says:

    Nice – great way to show his surprise at being discovered.

    http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/flash-friday-fiction-4/

  10. elmowrites says:

    Heehee! Typos aside, I chuckled at your story. Nice one. Thanks for your comment on mine. for your fans, I’m over here:
    http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/friday-fiction-blimps-and-balloons/

  11. Nifti says:

    ooh.. I’m guessing he’s in trouble now? and ” …sparking envy in the most beautiful swan…” love that line. Good story. Kaitlin and Michael, and fellow fictioneers, you are invited to see Up :) : http://niftitalks.com/2012/06/08/up/

  12. Atiya says:

    Wow he is in trouble now. I like how you described the clouds. I could picture that and also while I’m here I was a little cold. Great descriptions. I’m leaving my link : http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/06/friday-fictioneer-jump.html Have a great weekend

  13. Love the ending! He got caught :) I enjoyed this very much! Here’s mine for your reading pleasure: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/06/07/friday-fictioneers-6812/

  14. flyoverhere says:

    Simultaneous relief of escape, amazement at the beauty and surprise of being caught…..loved it.

  15. Cute little story here. I just have to add some typos reports – you left out the word “in”, in your first line, to read: “When stowing away a dirigible,” and you need a to exchange “that” for “which” here: “a blanket of grey-white that would spark envy”.
    Hope that helps, because otherwise, this was a totally charming little dirigible tale.
    From Laura
    And if you have not visited, here I am:
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

  16. Eep made me giggle, loved that ending! Way to go Mrs Admiral. I like the concept of sparking envy in a swan, that was a nice touch.

    http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/how-quickly-things-can-change
    (Thanks for your comment there.)

  17. Brandon Scott says:

    “Eep” sums it up perfectly. Nice job.

    authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/06/07/the-ogre/

  18. Prosing On says:

    I agree with everyone and giggled at your story. Glad there’s a woman at the helm, she’ll sort him out. Really cute. Thanks for the comment on mine.

  19. kathils says:

    Love it! “Eep.” Hee, hee.

  20. An apt and good take on the prompt with a fine twist. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/06/08/fridayfictioneers-emily/

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